Board Thread:General Discussion/@comment-34798955-20180310144518/@comment-32182236-20190629185210

@Mago:Have you improved? We'll see..


 * Asriel: I... I don't like this idea, Chara. (by the way, this is always green.. There's no way to mess this line up.. Unless you fused it with another line, or just plain wrote something else instead of his line.)
 * :Don't tell me you're crying?
 * Asriel:Wh.. what? N-no, I'm not.... big kids don't cry (Maybe so, maybe not. I think I'll bump it up from orange to yellow.)
 * Chara:Exactly,you have to be strong!
 * Asriel: Yeah, you're right.
 * Chara:Maybe you don't trust me?
 * Asriel:No! I'd never doubt you,Chara. Never!
 * Chara:So we have to be strong and free everyone!
 * Asriel:Y... yeah! We'll be strong! We'll free everyone.
 * Chara:Then what are we waiting for to start? (Then what are we waiting for? Let's start!)
 * Asriel:I'll go get the flowers.

This does indeed appear to be an improvement over your last time.

@Person:Yes, a new entry! This might not be as large as Gaster's Experiment, but it's still nice that we have you guys participating.


 * Asriel:I... I don't like this idea, Chara.
 * Chara:Are you scared, Asriel?
 * Asriel:Wh-what? N-No, I'm not...
 * Chara:...*gives a “you know what i always say” look*
 * Asriel:...big kids don't cry.
 * :Don’t worry Asriel, this plan won’t fail. Trust me.
 * Asriel:Yeah, you're right.
 * Chara:Are you doubting me? (This could either be the best line or one of the worst. Perhaps Asriel had somehow displayed doubt in the way he said Chara was right? Or did a Flowey and acted snarky?)
 * Asriel:No! I'd never doubt you, Chara! Never! (Either way, it still leads up into this one, so that's good. Besides, even my own submission had a problem with that last one.)
 * Chara:Good. This plan will work, Asriel, as long as you and I have the strength to pull it off.
 * Asriel:Y...yeah! We'll be strong! We'll free everyone!
 * Chara:Well then, what are we waiting for?
 * Asriel:I'll go get the flowers.

Looks like you have done the best so far! Almost a perfect build! And possibly actually one, depending on the cirmstances!