Board Thread:General Discussion/@comment-34798955-20180310144518/@comment-32182236-20190628223052

Alright.. Let's analyze your entries.. (Don't worry guys, if you missed out on the experiment... It's not actually over yet.)

We'll start with MML's, because that one came first. We'll see if you were able to make the whole thing good. (Good lines will be labeled green, and bad ones red. ...Questionable ones will be somewhere BETWEEN green and red (like yellow or orange), depending on how questionable it is. I'll be looking at the lines as if they were responses to the previous one, so it's possible to get a red Asriel line if you set the Chara line wrong. ...Believe it or not, my own fill-in didn't get perfect greens.. Chara's line about doubting I'd say is a yellow one.)


 * Asriel: I... I don’t like this idea, Chara.
 * Chara: Are you... crying over this?
 * Asriel: Wh-What? N-No, I’m not...
 * Chara: Come on! Remember what I always say? * Asriel: ...big kids don’t cry.
 * Chara: Exactly! We’re big enough to handle this.
 * Test Asriel: Yeah, you’re right.
 * Chara: ...you’re doubting that this plan will work, aren’t you?
 * Asriel: No! I’d never doubt you, Chara!Never! (The plan, or Chara, Asriel?)
 * Chara: Just remember, with the power of our SOULs combined, we’ll be able to do this!
 * Asriel: Y...Yeah! We’ll be strong! We'll free everyone! (Fixed a typo)
 * Chara: Now, let’s begin.
 * Asriel: I’ll go get the flowers.

...Well, that's passable. But did Mago do better? Well, let's analyze it and find out!


 * Asriel: I... I don't like this idea, Chara.
 * Chara:Don't tell me you're crying?
 * Asriel:Wh.. what? N-no, I'm not.... big kids don't cry. (Really, now? Turning two Asriel lines into one?)
 * Chara:Exactly,you have to be strong!
 * Asriel: Yeah, you're right.
 * Chara:Maybe you doubt that my plan gonna work?
 * Asriel:No! I'd never doubt you, Chara. Never! (Same problem as MML)
 * Chara:So we have to be strong and free everyone!
 * Asriel:Y... yeah! We'll be strong! We'll free everyone. I'll go get the flowers.

Well, looks like MML did better so far. Let's see who else has entries for me to evaluate.